Post by Goma's equines on Aug 25, 2008 7:21:56 GMT -5
I don't know where to put this, if it's better off in the "Writing section", go on and move it =)
So as some of you may know, English is not my first language. For the past couple days I've been on a creative frenzy and I finally wrote down the synopsis (sp?![???](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/huh.png)
) of my very first and dearest trilogy, from which I ripped Elinda and Méri xD
Here's the deal, I translated them into English too and I don't know if it sounds and is correct. =) So I'd really love if someone could read and spot some mistakes, see if it makes sense... To me it looks okay, but I'm suspicious XD So here it is:
The Scula Feti
To Elinda, the fact that no one believes in her dream doesn't stop her: she wants to become a Golden Knight, even though she's a girl, even though no one knows for sure if the Golden Knights still exist. But this doesn't stop her, and to pursue her dream, Elinda runs away from home, where nobody believes her. So she follows the Golden Knights' path; when she discovers that they were sorcerers ((o.O So may rerer)), other than great warriors, her own path becomes clear: Elinda must go to the Scula Feti, the Witchcraft School, and finds out the fascinating world of music and dance.
The Ice Castle
Now with the status of Practicing ((These have always confused me, but I think it's correct now)) Sorcerer, Elinda keeps pursuing her dream. But now she finds out a mysterious cube, a powerful magical artifact that causes her problems and raises several questions. Elinda knows she must get rid of it. And to know how to do so, nothing better than going to the Ice Castle, a fortress in the frozen North where sorcerers congregate to learn and study. But the trip is not easy: even though she finds old friends, she must also face new challenges – Dálya, ex-professor that starts hating her, dragons, cannibal tribes, and the polar bears, that can turn against Elinda and the friends at any moment. And to make it worse, the King begins to chase the sorcerers... The Ice Castle seems to be the perfect refuge and the ideal place for Elinda to open a new chapter in her pursue of the dream she has of becoming a Golden Knight.
The Golden Knights
Finally the cubes are where they belong and Elinda has one less concern. Now she plans on leaving the ice fortress with new friends and do the trip back safely, which is not easy... The chase to the sorcerers is worse than ever and Elinda and her friends become fugitives... which will start them up ((o.O Does the expression exist??? Does "launch" fit better?)) on new adventures and lead them to new places, meeting new people and facing new challanges... All of this will ultimately lead to a fight in order to give the rightful King his throne. And then a terrible thread ((not 100% sure if it's the right word xD)) shows up... The Black Knights! Finally, the opportunity Elinda has always dreamed of... the Golden Knights will come to fight and she'll be able of joining the Fraternity ((yeah, I know the word in portuguese, but apparently I made up the word "Confrary"...)) and become one of them. But it takes more than the Golden Knights to stop the intruders... Elinda and the friends must test all their abilities to gather as many sorcerers as they can and fight. Will they triumph? Who are the mysterious Black Knights? And the Golden Knights, will they show up? Will Elinda be able of becoming one of them, as she wishes so much?...
That's it. You can see there are some things I have doubts about. If you read all that, Elinda will hand you out a cookie and sing to you xD Meanwhile I've corrected some spelling mistakes, bless you "Spell Check".
So as some of you may know, English is not my first language. For the past couple days I've been on a creative frenzy and I finally wrote down the synopsis (sp?
![???](http://storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/huh.png)
![???](http://storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/huh.png)
Here's the deal, I translated them into English too and I don't know if it sounds and is correct. =) So I'd really love if someone could read and spot some mistakes, see if it makes sense... To me it looks okay, but I'm suspicious XD So here it is:
The Scula Feti
To Elinda, the fact that no one believes in her dream doesn't stop her: she wants to become a Golden Knight, even though she's a girl, even though no one knows for sure if the Golden Knights still exist. But this doesn't stop her, and to pursue her dream, Elinda runs away from home, where nobody believes her. So she follows the Golden Knights' path; when she discovers that they were sorcerers ((o.O So may rerer)), other than great warriors, her own path becomes clear: Elinda must go to the Scula Feti, the Witchcraft School, and finds out the fascinating world of music and dance.
The Ice Castle
Now with the status of Practicing ((These have always confused me, but I think it's correct now)) Sorcerer, Elinda keeps pursuing her dream. But now she finds out a mysterious cube, a powerful magical artifact that causes her problems and raises several questions. Elinda knows she must get rid of it. And to know how to do so, nothing better than going to the Ice Castle, a fortress in the frozen North where sorcerers congregate to learn and study. But the trip is not easy: even though she finds old friends, she must also face new challenges – Dálya, ex-professor that starts hating her, dragons, cannibal tribes, and the polar bears, that can turn against Elinda and the friends at any moment. And to make it worse, the King begins to chase the sorcerers... The Ice Castle seems to be the perfect refuge and the ideal place for Elinda to open a new chapter in her pursue of the dream she has of becoming a Golden Knight.
The Golden Knights
Finally the cubes are where they belong and Elinda has one less concern. Now she plans on leaving the ice fortress with new friends and do the trip back safely, which is not easy... The chase to the sorcerers is worse than ever and Elinda and her friends become fugitives... which will start them up ((o.O Does the expression exist??? Does "launch" fit better?)) on new adventures and lead them to new places, meeting new people and facing new challanges... All of this will ultimately lead to a fight in order to give the rightful King his throne. And then a terrible thread ((not 100% sure if it's the right word xD)) shows up... The Black Knights! Finally, the opportunity Elinda has always dreamed of... the Golden Knights will come to fight and she'll be able of joining the Fraternity ((yeah, I know the word in portuguese, but apparently I made up the word "Confrary"...)) and become one of them. But it takes more than the Golden Knights to stop the intruders... Elinda and the friends must test all their abilities to gather as many sorcerers as they can and fight. Will they triumph? Who are the mysterious Black Knights? And the Golden Knights, will they show up? Will Elinda be able of becoming one of them, as she wishes so much?...
That's it. You can see there are some things I have doubts about. If you read all that, Elinda will hand you out a cookie and sing to you xD Meanwhile I've corrected some spelling mistakes, bless you "Spell Check".